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Alone
Oct 3, 2007 23:00:07 GMT
Post by gizmoracer on Oct 3, 2007 23:00:07 GMT
So here it is the first ever poem I've written
Alone
A trivial trip, A walk in the park, Feels like climbing Everest, Alone in the dark.
The constant hammering, Of the pouring rain, Trying to find my way, Down a dark country lane.
The cloud that follows me, Through the day, through the night, My head it's swirling, I can't see the light.
My minds in a mess, When I close my eyes, The never ending lows, The never seeing highs.
Confusion and chaos, Is all that I see, Here I sit weeping, Under a tree.
How long, I do wonder, does the suffering go on, Will I ever get better, Where has my life gone?
The pain, so intense, I'm numb right through, Why can't I be like everybody? Why can't I be you?
Lying awake in the night, The peace is so loud, And above me still sits, My gloomy little cloud.
Through my eyes all I see, A life, black and white, No colour surrounds me, Someone please, put it right.
My children will grow, They'll flourish and bloom, Where does that leave me? All alone in my room.
Someone please come and save me, From my lonely exsistance, I see you all playing, In the far away distance.
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Alone
Oct 4, 2007 14:28:20 GMT
Post by Scarlet on Oct 4, 2007 14:28:20 GMT
Absolutely beautiful, what a gift you have Gizmoracer...I can identify with all you have written.
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Alone
Oct 4, 2007 15:41:08 GMT
Post by winegirl on Oct 4, 2007 15:41:08 GMT
Crikey iz, that brought a tear to my eye! And so sums up this damn illness and how we feel about it. Its beautiful hun, well done youxx
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Alone
Oct 4, 2007 17:38:07 GMT
Post by gizmoracer on Oct 4, 2007 17:38:07 GMT
Oh thanks guys I'm all embarrassed now.
I used to love writing stories at school, you have the imagination at that age. When I was ill I used to read the things others wrote and think wow I wish I could do that, but I would struggle writing my full name. Now I am so much better I can draw on the experiences and feelings and have the concentation to do something with it. Just wish I could do the same with my life physically then I could say I'm properlly recovered.
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Alone
Oct 4, 2007 20:45:00 GMT
Post by cheshire on Oct 4, 2007 20:45:00 GMT
That just about sums it upx
Great poemx
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Alone
Oct 5, 2007 6:33:27 GMT
Post by Scarlet on Oct 5, 2007 6:33:27 GMT
Just wish I could do the same with my life physically then I could say I'm properlly recovered.
Me too hun, but you are doing great and have real talent as a writer...
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Alone
Oct 5, 2007 16:43:34 GMT
Post by chica on Oct 5, 2007 16:43:34 GMT
Truly Beautiful. What a talent.
Love and hugs Chica
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Alone
Oct 6, 2007 10:18:56 GMT
Post by cinders on Oct 6, 2007 10:18:56 GMT
Wow!! That was great. Brought a tear to my eye too. Isnt it amazing that through suffering you learn what it is to make something so beautiful and touching?
You certainly have a talent there.
Love n big hugs Cinders xxx
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